I haven’t checked on the story in a while, so I might not have everything accurate.
I’ll tone down both characters and write from what is known about these two.
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Her actions are actually worse than my characterizations of her.
So I remembered her doing something wrong, but it’s worse than what I misremembered.
I’ll change the story accordingly.
Her doing something wrong? What are you referring to? If it’s having multiple sexual partners, you can get out of here with the slut shaming. If it’s an accusation of infidelity, that’s really a personal matter and we don’t know the details of their relationship. If it’s showing him a video, again, that’s personal, and we don’t know the context.
It seems to me that you’re not concerned at all about whether or not someone is characterized negatively,
just who is characterized negatively.
I will remove the word incel from the story as well now.
I’m sorry if you get the wrong idea, but it is no way an attempt to justify his actions.
It is in fact to showcase how hypocritical the black guard movement is.
I’m showing that the motive was non-political,
unless it’s about the type of politics they would have agreed upon,
you know, murder being bad, motive being the other person having done personal bad things,
but in no way justification for murder, and the black guard movement and the DPP,
had been actively blocking the arrest of the murderer of a young woman out of spite.
While I’ve seen supporters of the black guard jump at every other opportunity to have a women protected,
the moment it’s about US empire, they turn around on a whim and just ignore this injustice.
I understand your intent, that’s why I tried to suggest tweaking your language with how you spoke of her. No matter her sexual habits, she didn’t deserve to be strangled to death, that’s the point I was making.
I don’t understand. You could easily just reword it like
"Also demanding a murderer to walk free
and not some murderer who “bravely killed the CCP [sic]” mind you,
but some Hong Kong young man who choked his Republican Chinese ex-girlfriend to death in Taiwan
[for personal reasons]. "
I think just saying he killed his girlfriend isn’t taken as “political” but I think killing your girlfriend and killing your girlfriend because she cheated are both actions with a political content
I haven’t checked on the story in a while, so I might not have everything accurate.
I’ll tone down both characters and write from what is known about these two.
[edit]
Her actions are actually worse than my characterizations of her.
So I remembered her doing something wrong, but it’s worse than what I misremembered.
I’ll change the story accordingly.
Her doing something wrong? What are you referring to? If it’s having multiple sexual partners, you can get out of here with the slut shaming. If it’s an accusation of infidelity, that’s really a personal matter and we don’t know the details of their relationship. If it’s showing him a video, again, that’s personal, and we don’t know the context.
The important bit is that she was strangled to death by an incel, not the justifications the incel gave for it.
What!? No!
It seems to me that you’re not concerned at all about whether or not someone is characterized negatively, just who is characterized negatively.
I will remove the word incel from the story as well now.
I’m sorry if you get the wrong idea, but it is no way an attempt to justify his actions.
It is in fact to showcase how hypocritical the black guard movement is.
I’m showing that the motive was non-political,
unless it’s about the type of politics they would have agreed upon,
you know, murder being bad, motive being the other person having done personal bad things,
but in no way justification for murder, and the black guard movement and the DPP,
had been actively blocking the arrest of the murderer of a young woman out of spite.
While I’ve seen supporters of the black guard jump at every other opportunity to have a women protected,
the moment it’s about US empire, they turn around on a whim and just ignore this injustice.
I understand your intent, that’s why I tried to suggest tweaking your language with how you spoke of her. No matter her sexual habits, she didn’t deserve to be strangled to death, that’s the point I was making.
I don’t understand. You could easily just reword it like
"Also demanding a murderer to walk free and not some murderer who “bravely killed the CCP [sic]” mind you, but some Hong Kong young man who choked his Republican Chinese ex-girlfriend to death in Taiwan [for personal reasons]. "
On to the j6th contrast.
I’ve shortened it.
The most important thing is that these black guard supporters
know that they are going against their own values.
Thank you for being receptive to criticism.
I’d just remove all detail of what she did, no matter how you phrase it it reads as potential justification. Those details don’t matter.
It is important, because it showcases that the motive isn’t political.
Yes, but it’s the degree of specificity that is irking us I believe. You don’t have to showcase it. You could just say, “the motive wasn’t political.”
I think just saying he killed his girlfriend isn’t taken as “political” but I think killing your girlfriend and killing your girlfriend because she cheated are both actions with a political content